As I entered level two
I saw rapists in front of me
All of them together, Sandusky and his whole crew
Virgil and I walked towards them, over by the death tree
They were next to each other
Laying together in groups of three
Each one crying, being attacked by the other
Now felt the pain caused by rape
All Wishing they could be home back with their mother
I tried to ask Sandusky about his punishment
To quickly learn that for eternity
They would be burned and reminded of what they did constantly by other men
Others stood around waiting to be burned
Chanting the names of the victims
Reminding each rapist of what they have done.
They all now experienced the pain they caused to others
When deciding to touch children in the worldly life
And their suffering would never end in hell.
Virgil then told me that he couldn't handle the smell of burning flesh
So we continued walking past all the men
To see that they all had to suffer the same punishment.
Sandusky screamed for us to come back and save him
But a demon grabbed him back by the feet and hung him upside down over the flames
Screams were all we heard as we continued past these rapists.
What a horrible eternity they had to live
Being burned and reminded of their horrible actions
Against innocent children who didn't know what they had done.
In the end they all deserved
The pain they had to suffer for the wrong,
and pain they caused to their victims and their families.
My canto is in Level two with the lustful. They were lustful for younger children and caused them permanent mental pain. The punishment fits the crime because the pain they caused others is in return caused to them by being burned and constantly reminded of their victims.
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ReplyDeleteYour explanatory paragraph is short on analysis - why burning? how are they burned? (-3)
ReplyDeletegood idea with current allusions but it's a really vague contrapasso... anyone can get burned - why? (-3)
you didn't "highlight" end-rhyme of contrapasso (-1)
18/25
*** Revised grade... your canto was one of the first that I read, I think I could have been a bit more generous with points - revised 19.5/25
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